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Review:CambAngst says:
So First War Horrors, you say? Yep, I'd say you nailed it.

I absolutely loved the idea of showing these events through the eyes of a poor, mistreated house elf. Tully is the perfect fly on the wall to explore the atrocities committed in the Lestrange Estate. She's nothing but a tool to Bellatrix and Rodolphus. A soulless automaton that keeps their house clean and occasionally does their dirty work for them. But Tully does have a soul, and the horrors that she's seen have left an indelible mark of sadness on that soul. In the end, that mark seems to have led to a moment of hesitation and reluctance to obey that saved James, Sirius and the little girl.

You did an awesome job with the dark and horrible imagery that set the scene for the main events of the story. As you gradually reveal who the principal actors are and their role in the events about to play out, I got more and more immersed in the chilling darkness of it all. The pace of the story and the way it built up were beautifully done.

I appreciated the fact that you didn't give Tully a feel-good, heroic ending. That wouldn't have been at all realistic. House elves obey. Like you said, it's woven into their souls. The magical bond that Tully couldn't escape, even when she desperately wanted to, was a great way to illustrate her awful reality.

I loved how you set up the concept of death as a release near the beginning of the story. That tied together so nicely with Tully's fate. For her, death was a release from her terrible life of servitude to such awful people.

Your writing was terrific. Kudos to you and Alli for great editing! Great job overall!

Author's Response: Dan!

Hi. I was worried that this wasn't really.. horrorific enough to qualify, so I'm happy you think it was!

I really struggled with how I wanted this to all end. I though about Tully actually having to go through with the orders and kill Edgar's daughter. I mean, we know the entire family dies sometime during the war. Or if I wanted to have Tully escape with them.. but neither of those felt right. I wanted Tully to get to do something that she's proud of before getting killed.

It's so odd to try and gauge how much control a house-elf is actually under. We know dobby couldn't tell Harry about the chamber, but not what would happen if he told. So I have to assume that it's not so much what would happen if you break an order or rule from your master, but that you physically can't. Poor little house-elves :(.

Thank you so much for this lovely review, and I'm so happy that you liked this! And that you're back from nowhere land, mwahaha!

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