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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Yep, me again. ;) -BookDinosaur- here, blah blah. :)

I really liked this chapter. I think my favourite bit was at the beginning. I love how Merissa mentioned her Nanny-it really showed how rich and luxurious her lifestyle was before she went to Hogwarts, and how she's still a little bit spoilt. And I adored the part where she dressed in her school uniform. It's obvious you know what you're writing about here, with the completely different clothes she wore that were very believable in that era. They sound so smothering, I would hate to have to wear clothes like that every day!

I like how clueless she was about wizarding things like the house-elves and portraits, it was really in character. And the ghost professor, I'm assuming he was Professor Binns? And I like how you made her reaction so horrified when she learnt about the house-elves harming themselves, it showed how caring and kind she was underneath.

I also enjoyed the little detail about Ollivander coming to the school rather than the students going to him, I guess it makes sense in a funny way.

I think my CC for you would be to put in more description, I hardly know anything about the classrooms or corridors, although when you want to, your description can be excellent, as shown by the little episode with the clothes. :D

All in all, this was a great chapter I really enjoyed reading.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I agree, it would be difficult to dress up like that all the time. Though I suppose if it's something you're used to... :)

Yes, the ghost professor is Professor Binns. Apparently he's been there for a lot longer than I had first thought!

I know it would take longer to drive to London from wherever they lived to go to Diagon Alley given they were using carriages instead of cars. I opted they spend their time traveling to Hogwarts to reach school in time and Mr. Ollivander could come to the school and give them their wands.

I've added the note to add more descriptions for the classrooms and corridors. Thank you! :)

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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