:O It's Terry Boot! I don't know why, but I'm glad you chose a canon character, it sort of grounds the whole story in the magical world even more, and seeing as we know virtually nothing about him, you're pretty much at liberty to do what you like with him. I think it'll be interesting that he's older than her, just cos it'll be another dynamic in their relationship... I'm very interested as to what Tor's friends will think of him...
I really loved the way you wrote that delicious feeling of falling in love. I could really feel Tor's excitement about seeing him, and joy when she *did* see him, and that general anticipation that you get in situations like that. It was so sweet.
I always enjoy the little italicised sections you put in about her father and his Death Eater life. They make a great contrast with the rest of Tor's more everyday concerns, and help to remind us that there's a darker edge to her life too!
Ooh the Quidditch trials were exciting! (although I was pretty sure that Tor would get in :P) I liked all her friends' advice to her about the trials, it made me smile, as does her little crush on Theodore! One little thing- in previous chapters, I'm pretty sure that you were referring to Cousin Zelda as Cousin Zena- you might want to fix that!
I'm definitely starting to dislike Griz now! Although the bit about her shrunken head did make me laugh (I love how you mentioned its name!) She seems like she could be a powerful enemy for Tor though, and her hitting the Bludger at her shows that there's some animosity between them. So I can't wait to see how that will unfold!
Another great chapter! Well done ♥
Author's Response: Hi darling, great to see you back! :)
Yes, it's Terry! I wanted to use a canon character who, like you said, helps set the story in Hogwarts era and connect it to Harry's world. And yes, there's a lot of freedom to define his character! I have a very clear image of him in my head now, and it's become my headcanon as well! :P
Aw, I wanted to give Tor a lovestruck teen moment! Despite the dark sides to her personality she is still a fourteen year old girl with a crush, and I'm glad you found it sweet! :)
I'm very pleased that you like the Yaxley references and anecdotes as well, I really enjoy including them and elaborating on the other people in Tor's life. There's a lot more to Yaxley than Tor realizes, and he's a lot of fun to imagine.
Haha, Tor was pretty confident about her Quidditch, wasn't she? I'm glad you find the Theo crush fun, and how the boys were of course trying to give her advice. Oops, silly me, I'll go back and fix that! :D
I'm glad you pointed out the Griz shrunken head bit because I thought it was quite typical of Griz! She really isn't very pleasant, and their relationship is definitely not going to get better.
Thank you for another lovely review! :D