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Review:BookDinosaur says:
-BookDinosaur- here again!

Oh, before I forget, I just read through Chapter One again and spotted a couple of grammar mistakes, you might want to go and get those fixed. ;)

I love what she named her owl, it's such a nice name, and I like how she gets it out of a textbook. That's reminiscent of Harry and Hedwig, isn't it? I just liked that little detail. :)

I like Widow Bellum; she seems strict but soft underneath, if you get what I mean. Also, I love how you've stuck so closely to the era you're writing in-your formal, older language doesn't falter and all the little corrections Widow Bellum gave to Merissa really helped to get me into the timeframe you're writing in.

I didn't spot any spelling/punctuation/grammar mistakes in this chapter, so well done on that. I think my one CC for you would be that Merissa needs to be more surprised at all the magic, because at the moment she seems pretty calm about it all, except for in the carriage where she was asking all those questions.

Anyway, overall I really liked reading this chapter. So now I'm going on to the next one. :P

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I'll look through chapter one again and see if I can't find those errors. Thank you!

I didn't think about it at the time, but it is very much like Harry naming Hedwig. :)

I definitely wanted Widow Bellum to be strict but in a kind way.

I'll revise the chapter to include more emotion from Merissa concerning magic.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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