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Review:Lululuna says:
Tag! :) I'm back!

Ah, I loved this chapter! First of all, Millie's sassiness is really growing on me, I think her dry commentary is hilarious. I like how she scorns Sarah's unrequited love, and how Lily lectures her about pretty much everything. The bit about Lily being a closet Quidditch fan made me smile- she totally is. And the prank was great, I really liked the paragraph where Millie was like... "Yes, I know it doesn't actually rain..." as if she was addressing the sceptical reader herself. And how there was absolutely no question it was anyone but the Marauders.

So, Millie's parents died? I'm sure we'll find out more, but I'm so interested to learn what happened! The serious undertones in the story are very intriguing. I like the little references to Voldy, like when it started raining and Millie said everyone went nuts like Voldy had walked in. Millie's pretty brave too, calling him Voldemort!

Aw poor Sirius, so concerned about his reputation! I'm not sure if being the type of guy who wants to father Marisa's children is worse for him than being lying cheating scum, but it's funny how both worry him so much. I feel as if Millie will agree to be his fake girlfriend, but both will have ulterior motives for it.

Another great chapter, I loved how long it was! It's great to see the plot beginning to unroll, and I'm curious to see where you'll continue the story both in terms of Sirius and Millie's relationship and the more sinister happenings in the wizarding world. Great job! :)

Author's Response: Millie's sassiness is so much fun to write. It's different to the kind of sassiness that I usually like to read in a character, but it works well for her! Thanks for the compliment!

Sarah's fun that way, and Lily's lecturing is fun because I get to write a lot of sass all around! And of course she's a closet Quidditch fan!

I kind of forget the War sometimes, and then remember it at weird intervals - it just goes to show that I really don't plan this story - I just write whatever comes out! But I think there's a bit more backstory later on!

Sirius was a whole heap of fun to write here. This is the first time we see him actually doing something, rather than just brooding!

Unfortunately, if you liked the length of this one, you'll be disappointed by the next couple - they're on the shorter side, I'm afraid! But it was wonderful of you to drop by!


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