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Review:academica says:
Hi Jami! Here to kick off my half of our exchange!

Gah, Oliver. He's so wonderful. He was probably my first Harry Potter crush (and then I met Sirius, ugh). I think he's really well suited for fluff and I'm excited to see your take on his potential match-up here!

Haha, he wants to indoctrinate George and Angelina's child early! That's typical Oliver :)

I really liked the way you threaded the emotion through the first few paragraphs of this chapter. You were dealing with emotions on both ends of the spectrum--pleasant ones related to the present and more painful ones related to the war--and yet you were able to move between them quite seamlessly so that nothing felt out of place. The imagery you used to describe Colin's body was especially heart-wrenching and powerful.

I really like this idea of Oliver's love interest being a single mother. It lends a sense of maturity to the story as a whole and his character individually and already sets this apart from the sea of other male character / oc stories that exist on the archive. I liked how you focused on the small details in their interaction, like the subtle changes in Mia's expression. It's nice to see her being appropriately guarded but not totally turned off to him, in terms of trying to at least be cordial for Aidan's sake. I'm sure Aidan will be a crucial part of anything that ends up developing between Oliver and Mia later.

Very interesting beginning! I'm afraid I don't have any critique for you, though that's a good thing :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda! I honestly had no idea so many people liked Oliver. I kind of got the idea of Mia's half of the story first and knew I wanted this to take place post hogwarts but not next gen, and not with any of the main HP cast as the MC. So, Oliver just sort of fit really well. Seeing how many people like reading about his character, I'm considering myself lucky for choosing him :P!

I'm so excited that nothing felt out of place with the more serious emotions at the start. I wanted to establish right away some of Oliver's feelings toward one happened, and I think it would probably to be hard to think of them all hanging out without remembering a time when that wasn't as happy of an occasion. I still worry that I scared a bit of people off with the amount of seriousness at the start of a so called fluff, but oh well :P!

I've wanted to write about a single mother for some time now. More than anything I want to get myself back into more OF, and I thought this served as a good transition. It obviously is FF but there won't be as many already created characters.

I'm so excited you like the start of this, and thank you so much for this lovely review ♥ I was really nervous putting this up without Dan beta reading it for me, just because that other person saying, 'no it's not rubbish,' adds a lot of confidence for me. But again, I need to stand on my own two feet if I want to work on OF again :P!



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