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Review:AlexFan says:
I'm so sorry for getting to your story so late but I've been really busy and my review thread actually escaped my mind! The good thing is that my review is finally here.

I think the thing that you've got going for your story at the moment is that it will really interest readers. There is t much of an explanation on what school was like back then and so reading about what might have been is actually very interesting.

I thought it was quite clever of Merissa to write her sisters a fairytale except it was real. That was actually a really great way of telling her family what happened but in an innocent and creative way.

This story definitely had better flow than all of the other ones that I've read so far and I like how you took your time with everything in the chapter. There was plenty of description and dialogue but you had a good balance going so there wasn't more of one than the other.

The only thing I'm wondering is, isn't the Levitation Charm "Wingardium Leviosa," or is it part of the story and kind of showing how some spells may have changed or evolved over time? Other than that I think you did a great job.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Not a problem. I understand completely.

I like writing about the parts that were skipped over and left out. And to do so in a way that the story fits into the canon. :)

I had to think long and hard about how Merissa would keep her promise to tell her mother what was happening at school, especially when she couldn't write about the magical parts. And I learned how difficult it is to actually write a fairytale! I think I stared at my computer blankly for far too long. :I

The difference in the spells is part of the story. The amount they learned is amazing.

What I'm seeing for this story is that they learn how to describe what they want the spell to do. Which in turn can make the spell more powerful. And can also show the differences in education.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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