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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Another review!

This was a bit of an action packed chapter!

I felt a little feeling of dread when Hermione was attacked by Selwyn, and was very glad when Ron and the others caught up with them. I loved your descriptions of the love that Hermione and Ron feel for each other, they're wonderful descriptions. And I think your characterisations were all really good in this chapter too.

I think during the dispatchment of the Death Eaters the flow was slightly disrupted; sometimes I had to read a few sentences a couple of times to get what was going on. So maybe reading through that sequence again might be a good idea, just to smooth it over a bit :)

I also kind of wanted to see the moment when Hermione and Ron found and restored her parent's memories. That could have been a great moment to include some great emotional writing. Unless it's included as a flashback in the future xD

All in all, good chapter! :)

Author's Response: hi again! :D I'm so glad to see you back again :)

Well, I am really glad that you liked the descriptions of Ron and Hermione's love, because that was my absolute favourite part of this chapter :D so that makes me really happy!

Thank you so much for telling me! I'll definitely go back and take a second look at that, I don't want it to be confusing, of course ;) I really appreciate that you pointed it out, because it helps make the story better.

You're also right about that moment. I thought about writing it, but I just couldn't come up with anything and decided to leave it out. But after this comment from you, I'll definitely add something about it if the inspiration ever strikes. I can actually think of a moment in a future chapter in which I could incorporate a flashback.. ;)

I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so, so much for reading and reviewing, and know how happy it has made me! I really appreciate your encouraging words and your helpful suggestions :D

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