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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I shall now review your story! :)

This was a really good glance into the lives of the "Wotters" in between the end of Deathly Hallows and the epilogue. I liked how you wrote it from Molly's perspective because it gave the story a reminiscent quality, perfect coming from a grandmotherly woman like her.

Your description at the beginning was very good. I could really see the scene in the way you laid it out for me. It was also really nice that you put in some action between the details of jobs and children--you made the children do something, which kind of gave more substance to their various personalities. However, I would have loved to see more of that throughout the chapter. For instance, what about Teddy? What does he look like? How old is he? Does he get along with the other kids? Do he and Victoire have a friendship thing going on? What color is his hair now? All of these are just little details that would add a little more shape to the story, but they don't have to be added. I am only here to suggest things. :)

I was amused by the fact that you included the Dursleys: FOUR kids?! Whoa! However, I'd also like to know more about them. Are any of the kids magical? Is Caroline a witch? (I'm guessing that she's probably not, but one can never tell!) What did you have in mind for them? What do you see them as being? I'd really like to know!! Then again, maybe Molly has never seen them. That would explain why she wouldn't describe them much, but I'd like to know whether she has or hasn't anyway, just for closure.

I'm very surprised that this story hasn't been reviewed before--it looks to be hot off the presses! I'm very glad that you requested a review from me, because this really was a lovely story. Seeing a scene pre-epilogue through someone else's eyes was a really cool change of pace. :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I did enjoy writing from Molly's point of view.

I've added notes to include more about Teddy as you suggested. And I'll include more information about Neville's children.

I had to look at that piece of information a few times. But it kept saying "several" children, so I chose four. :)

Since the Secrecy Statute has been eased for those with Muggle relatives, Molly is really getting to meet Dudley's family and Hermione's parents for the first time in a wizarding setting.

I will add more information on the Dudley's family in particular. And add Molly wondering a little bit more about Dudley and his family. Caroline isn't a witch and none of the children are magical. I had considered it, but they are comfortable with magic.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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