Hi! :) So I stumbled across this story and am so glad I did. I love it! I actually just kept reading obsessively without stopping to review (I'm sorry! Bad!) but hopefully this will be nice long one to make up for it! :)
First of all, I love how you chose Fred II as the main character. I feel like he gets pushed to the side a lot in fan fiction, but he's such a great character and you write him so well! I like how you've turned stereotypes on their head in this story: like while Freddie is silly, he's a lot more than this goofy, carefree prankster. I love how he's a prefect as well, that was so unexpected! Then James, instead of being a playboy character, is rather down-to-earth and loved up with Ollie. Speaking of, their relationship is so entertaining and refreshing to read, it makes me laugh but also fits the story so well. Rose and Molly are also great, and even though we only get Freddie's bias opinion I feel like I have a good idea of their personalities.
Fred himself is such a wonderful narrator, and I really enjoy reading from his perspective. He's thoughtful and ridiculous, kind and callous, self-conscious and confident. You've done an amazing job of bringing him to life, and his voice really shows through in every observation and phrase.
Now, the George father-son relationship is one of my favourite parts of the story. I loved the part a few chapters back where Freddie was talking about his complicated relationship with his father, and you've done a really interesting job of turning the silly George of the twins into a grown man who still grieves for his lost brother and is harder because of it. The line that said something like "I knew he wasn't saying goodnight to me" was so powerful and showed me so much about both characters without having to say it, and really brought the tragedy of losing Fred I to light. The letters from George to Freddie are really incredible: I like the sub-plot of the joke shop and their disagreements over it, and how Angelina is characterized as a loving, understanding mother but also the wife that George adores and likes to tease. The relationship between Freddie and Roxy is interesting as well, and I really enjoyed Freddie's memories of how close they were. It made sense somehow, that Roxy would grow distant after the disappointment of not making Gryffindor, and the loss of thinking she let her brother down. Freddie's jealously over Scorpius and Roxy's relationship is great as well, and I really feel for him. I wonder if Roxy will be supportive when everyone finds out about the baby, and whether that will help bring them back together?
Now, speaking of the baby. I'm usually not a huge fan of pregnancy fics because they can be very glamourized and cliche, but I think you've done a good job at avoiding these cliches and writing a realistic, well-rounded story. The fact that it's told from the boy's perspective is rare, and I think Ryan is such an unconventional teen mom. I actually really like her, and can't wait for Freddie to learn more about her! I do like Annie as well, however... in fact, I pretty much love and engage with all these characters that you've brought to life. You've really created a whole world for Freddie, with many different things and characters interacting within it.
In case you couldn't tell, I love this story! :)
Author's Response: Look at this review! Godzilla review! You're so amazing, I can't even put it into words!!
I have to say I'm so glad you stumbled upon this story. I understand that not a lot of people love pregnancy stories, especially in a guy's POV, but it means a lot that people are reading this.
I LOVE Fred II. I have a huge bias toward Ron, Fred, and George in Hogwarts-era fiction, so when I started writing James II in Breaking the Quidditch Code with Freddie as his best friend, I knew I had to write a story with Fred as the main character. He speaks to me. :) Which is weird to say, but I really love him. I love how deep he is, just like you mentioned, and I really appreciate that you see what I'm trying to do.
Rose is hilarious. She's so much fun to write. As is Molly. I feel like both of them are constantly at each other's throats at Christmas gatherings.
So happy you like Fred. the only thing I can say about him is I thought about George and how he would raise a son with his own past but also with wanting his son to have everything. Which is how I ended up with Freddie.
Fred's family is one of my favorite parts about the story and I'm glad you are liking that as well. George is so complex after losing his brother and I wanted to shed some light on it. Fred was a part of him (a big reason why I wrote "Heroes") and that really impacted who he is as a person and how he raised his kids. And of course his family has a lot of pressure on Gryffindor, so Roxy not getting it really ran her through the ringer. Unfortunately, Fred can't understand it so he doesn't know how to fix it.
Bingo. bingo on the pregnancy right there.
I had actually read a few and I kept getting annoyed because to me it felt like the pregnancy was just there as a subplot when it needed to be there. The fact of the matter is for nine months it's always there and it isn't going anywhere. It impacts every bit of life, not just for Ryan. And of course I wanted to put it in a boy's perspective since i couldn't find any of those stories...
You'll definitely learn a LOT more about Ryan as the story moves forward. The other day I wrote some of those scenes and really loved the way they turned out. so I'm excited for people to read them.
Thank you SO much for this AMAZING review. Really. You're fabulous! I can't wait to see what you think of the rest of the story!!