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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello, here from review tag! Though I haven't forgotten about your next requested review, expect it coming up soon! :)

Ah, I really liked this chapter! (not that I don't like all the chapters!). I really like how well integrated into the regular world of Hogwarts Brienne is, and how much you create the atmosphere and sense of what it's like to be an ordinary Hogwarts student. The descriptions of the ordinary trials of Quidditch practice and details of their classes really enhance this and emulate the world of PoA. :)

Fred and George are just so great, I love how you write them and how Fred is the slightly more obnoxious one while George is more reserved. Their irritation of Snape was very entertaining and very in character, I really enjoyed it! :)

I'm so happy you wrote in Sir Cadogan, again this situates the story so well in PoA. He's such an entertaining character, and I think you got him just right. When he called Brienne a "scurvy maid" I just laughed, I could totally tell how indignant she would be!

The twins' jealousy over Cedric was great as well, I imagine many almost-couples across Hogwarts might be having similar conversations! :P

I think you did a really good job of writing the Quidditch match, I could really imagine it in my mind. It's interesting what Quidditch would have been like from an observer's POV, while in the books we usually see it through Harry's when he's playing. Poor Bri, being affected so badly by the Dementors, though of course I'm not surprised she is. The way her memories and grief intersect with her daily life is a very strong way of showing how her mother's death is a constant thought lingering and haunting her mind.

Another great chapter, my dear! :) I'll be back for the next one hopefully sooner rather than later! :D

Author's Response: Hi!

Writing Sir Cadogan was so fun! He's such a funny character. And I love making Fred the more obnoxious one with George slightly more composed xD It makes it seem real to me, and definetely gives them both individuality.

I'm glad you liked the Quidditch match and Brienne's memories; I think it would be an interesting flashback to include. There are more of Brienne's thoughts about her grief and her mother's death in the next few chapters, so very much looking forward to your next review :)

Thank you so much for reviewing!


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