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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
This one shot is absolutely brilliant - the whole afterlife idea is really original, your characterisation is spot on and I think it was altogether a fantastic and incredibly touching one shot.

It's very effective the way you make it so that they don't remember much after dying - I love the steps in James' head as he mentally goes through the past days events and tries to recall how he died. That was very insightful, and introduced us to James in a very inventive way. I love the way you prtrayed the relief when they find each other, and how beautiful he sees her as. This really added to how realistic they were as a couple (amazingly so - you write Jily so well!) and also made it even more moving and sad with the fact that they died.

The whole title, and the way Lily's still waiting to give Harry advice, is extremely unique and clever. I love how it connects with a memory, that it refers to when Lily was pregnant, and you tied in brilliantly with the end; managing to also hint at what they'd be doing in the future, which is very hard in the afterlife!

The characterisation of James and Lily is perfect; I adore how you've written them as these caring, relaxed parents - and the quirky bits of humour you add in make this even more enthralling and engaging. Hilarious lines such as: "flailing my arms like a pissed off adolescent," really make it a less tense story and lets the reader kind of settle in to it more. I love how this funny side of him is, in contrast to how distraught he is when he realizes Peter betrayed them. Oh! That's another thing, I thought you made Lily and James discover the truth really well, not to mention showed a Ravenclaw side to Lily. It broke my heart as I read when James discovers Peter betrayed them, and I thought it was tragic when they thought Frank and Alice would bring Harry up.

The plot is flawless; engaging, riveting and extremely moving. I think it's definitely the sort of one shot that's memorable and stays with you long after you've read it. The characters are so relatable, and you can really empathise with them. Also, it's an awesome take on death and the afterlife, and has connotations of purgatory too. This has been a compelling and altogether heart warming/breaking at the same time one shot, that was an absolute pleasure to read.

Sophie :D

Author's Response: Hi, sophie!

Wow, you sure know how to make somebody feel good about themselves. :) This story started out as a combination of a sudden obsession with afterlife fics and a need to take a break from Detox for a while. An awful lot is written about James and Lily before their deaths, so I'm really glad you liked my little glimpse into what might have happened just after Voldemort killed them.

The human mind is adaptable in a lot of pretty amazing ways, and I thought that James's mind would probably want to shield him from the horrible realization about how he died for as long as possible. So he has to muddle his way through until the terrible moment when it all comes back to him.

I liked the idea that James and Lily would exist in a sort of purgatory for a time, waiting to be there for Harry when he needed them the most. They both sacrificed so much to give him a chance to live, it just seemed appropriate to me.

I'm really pleased that you liked my James and Lily. I definitely owe a lot of credit to Jami's Before They Fall for all of my head canon on the two of them. And I don't like fics that portray either one of them as *too* mature, since they were both 21 when they died. Of everything that happens in the story, I agree that their thoughts about how Harry's life would turn out was the saddest. There really was no way they could have known how awful parts of Harry's life would be. :(

Thanks for all of your kind words! I'm really happy that you thought it was good. Thanks for the lovely review!


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