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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi lovely!

This chapter was such an awesome way to move the story forward.

I loved seeing the start through Scorpius's perspective, and was really impressed with your details! I loved that you're keeping consistent with the hot Egyptian weather, and really enjoyed the descriptions about the sand tussling around on the ground and the stray cats. And I think I'd have a bigger issue with my shoes turning color than Scoprius had. I like my shoes :S! But it made it all that much more realistic!

The interaction between him and Rose and D was really interesting I think she's probably just shy and not as used to the casual interactions, and maybe she's a bit put off by Scorpius's handsome face? Hehe.

The transition into the dinner was well done and felt very smooth, and it made me so hungry! I got really excited when he started telling us the myth. I love certain types of history, especially when myths (or what they think are) are intertwined!

Scorpius already having some knowledge of it made a lot of sense, and I LOVED how we could tell how intrigued Rose was. It stayed very true to the character you're building for her.

This was such a good chapter and really served to move the plot forward. They're going on an adventure!! I'm probably a little too excited for that, but it's going to be so much fun!

Awesome chapter, Kiana!

Author's Response: Hi Jami!

I'm so glad that you liked Scorpius' perspective as it was fun to mix it up a bit. Haha, I know I used to not have any details and in this chapter I had put so much in I was worrie people would get bored :P I would probably have a bigger issue to, but he's a guy so you know!

You're right about the shyness! Though Scorpius is very handsome :P They'll become better friends later on in the story though!

I'm glad that you liked the transition because doing them always scares me! Yay I made you excited, haha as for the myth I've got no more to say on the matter!

I'm so glad that you liked how intrigued Rose was! I always imagined her to be a mini-Hermione in my head thought slightly less-extreme so it was fun to do.

Don't worry about being excited, I'm a little too excited to write about it! Thanks for another amazing review, Jami ♥

-Kiana


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