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Review:nott theodore says:
Oh no, what a cliffhanger! That's mean!

The opening with James and Brigid discussing his options for other teams makes me think that he's a shoo-in for the England position, because if they're asking for him even before he's made it known that he's available, then he's got to be brilliant. I'm interested to know what he'll do with those teams. Do world cup players go and play abroad as well or does the competition take place during that time? And I wonder how Carlotta will affect his decision as well, since they're not at a stage where she would automatically go with him to Australia or anywhere.

I love Lily in this - she's one of my favourite characters. She's so hardworking and ambitious and has done so much to get to the position she's in. It can't be easy for any Squib, but in a family like the Potters it must be even harder to deal with. It's great that she has such brilliant friends and has learnt to deal with it and move on with her life like normal.

The part with Maddie trying to hide all the quaffles and chocolate frogs from her parents was hilarious and I could picture it all so vividly! I hate packing as well so I can definitely understand why they were all desperate to be able to use magic but had to avoid the Muggles seeing them. I'd forgotten about the wardrobe as well, but the idea of Harry doing something like that which he's not really supposed to is funny - I can easily imagine that happening!

Carlotta is really becoming more comfortable with the wizarding world, isn't she? I really enjoyed seeing her go to Diagon Alley by herself and gaining by it because she's a Muggle. I love that she's so fascinated by everything that the wizarding world holds and what she can take from it - including the cooking. I'm not entirely sure that pumpkin would go with fish, but she might as well try... :P

And the phone call! That was a cruel cliffhanger to leave this chapter on! I'm convinced that James is going to get the offer to play for England, because he was chosen once before and everyone can see how talented he is. He really deserves it! And why else would he get a call if it wasn't a call up for England? But I'm still nervous in case Demelza is worried about his past behaviour and decides to go for someone else. Now I've just thought that it might not even be a call about're messing with my mind here!

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter and I hope you update soon!

Sian :)

Author's Response: I like cliffhangers. When they're mine. ;)

James' talent goes without saying. His downfall is his conduct. But he's proven that he can handle the domestic game; as far as Demelza's aware, his behaviour has suggested that he can't hack it at international level, not yet anyway. So other teams' interest in him doesn't automatically mean that he's a guaranteed pick for England. If that makes sense. :P

The scene with Lily and Maddie was very enjoyable to write, as they always are. I feel like I underused Lily's wardrobe in the end. I created it for convenience, and so that I could sneak in a Narnia reference and the closet joke of Maddie's, but James didn't seem to use it much in the end. Nevertheless, it served its purpose. Harry would definitely fiddle with the wardrobe when he's not supposed to! Naughty him. ;)

Carlotta IS becoming more comfortable with the wizarding world, but she's by no means fully used to it by now, and there will always be something new to surprise her. I liked the thought of her trotting off to Diagon Alley by herself. :)

Yeah, the phone call is actually Allegra, ringing to tell James he has dragon pox after all ... I jest, I jest! Next chapter is in the queue so your question should be answered soon! Thanks for reviewing :)

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