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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Taylor! Iíve been meaning to read something of yours for a while and I just saw you posted in the new story thread and decided to check this out. I had never read a Hugo/OC story before, so I was really excited to read this.

This one-shot brought tears to my eyes! Ah it was so cute and adorable, but the ending! I really liked the use of different tenses because I had sense of foreboding due to the present tense. We saw from the past tense sections that they had a pretty idyllic relationship and that made me wonder why Anslee was feeling like that in the present. At first I thought they had only broken up but I think it was the mention of the picture with Hugo being at the wheel which made it click in my head.

I really liked the whole sense of ambiguity about this story. At first I was finding out the identity of the OC. I thought it might be a relation of Colinís due to her uncle dying and her love for pictures and cameras and I was glad to see it was proved correct. Iíve never read a story about his relation before but I really liked how you added to it and the reason why she had the camera was really sweet.

Then there was the sense of ambiguity because, like I said before, we knew something was wrong but we didnít know what was wrong. I think that worked really well as it kept me eagerly reading throughout to find out what the what was. I think it almost made the ending of it even more shocking and it was so horrible.

Your characterisation of Anslee and Hugo was wonderful. Iíve always felt bad for Hugo as he seems to be ignored in next gen stories so I loved seeing him have the limelight here. I liked how you gave him twists such as him being the pranker but a romantic person at heart. I mean, the way he asked Anslee to Hogsmeade was so, so, so cute. I really liked Anslee too, and you established her character really well for a one-shot and I felt that I knew her well.

The uses of the quotes were really great. I feel bad because I really love To Kill A Mockingbird and I donít remember where these come from, Iíll definitely re-read it and try and find where your quotes were. I thought this was a wonderful one-shot Taylor, and I could go on but I canít really think of any others way to express how much I liked it. Good luck in the challenge! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi Kiana! Sorry for the late response!

I feel bad that it brought tears to your eyes, but at the same time, I don't, because that was kinda the point, haha. :P I kind of liked adding the little hints to what would happen throughout, as foreshadowing is my favourite!

As for Anslee being related to Colin, I knew that this would be the OC looking at pictures, so I decided that the Anslee naturally had to be a relation of Colin's. :)

Hugo was so much fun to write! He's so ignored in FF, but I really wanted him to be quirky and not a "cookie-cutter" hot guy, but still amazing in his own right. I'm glad that you like how I characterized them both.

I'll admit, I actually didn't know where that quote came from either when I first got it! But that might also be because I haven't read that book since freshman literature class...

Thanks so much for reviewing this!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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