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Review:BellaFan202 says:
Hi! I'm so sorry for the long wait! D:

That was, I must say, pretty interesting. Also kind of confusing, but mostly interesting. What year were the twins supposed to be in? Also, why is no one in the school interested in the opposite sex? That's a little bit weird, considering the whole school is composed of teenagers with raging hormones, but maybe there's something in the water, I don't know. :P

The way this is set up, it seems like Lorcan is going to end up seducing Cassiopeia and they're going to end up falling in love and living happily ever after, which doesn't seem like it goes with the No Romance thing, so maybe I'm wrong. But that's just what it seems like right now.

The whole chapter seemed to flow really well. You went quickly from one event to the next, without leaving out too many details or skipping out on dialogue, which is good. I always find that difficult to do, so kudos to you. :)

The characters are pretty likable, although Lorcan seems really cynical and Lysander seems like his head is way up in the clouds, but that's okay because twins don't have to be exactly the same. :P

That's really about all I've got to say at the moment, but I hope you found this helpful and I hope you'll request the next chapter! :)

~BellaFan202~

Author's Response: Hi! I'm sorry that it took me so long to respond to this!

Thank you so much for reviewing my story! I'm glad you found it interesting, but I think there are some things that I should explain to you, since you are the first one to ask these questions!! :)

When I wrote the twins, I envisioned them to be upperclassmen--5th year or above--but I didn't make it specific because it was something that didn't really figure too much into the plot. I probably could add something in there about their age so that confusion is cleared up.

The whole "not being interested in the opposite sex" thing is kind of Freudian--basically, Hogwarts has gone back to when girls and boys avoided each other because of "cooties." Of course, I probably could make that a little clearer as well. It's totally satirical--I know that things like this would NEVER happen in a normal Hogwarts. :P

The whole seduction vibe that you're sensing is completely on purpose--good on you for picking up on it! I wanted to make things seem very tense and almost on the verge of romance, and then swipe the rug from underneath all of that, so to speak. In the following chapters, there is a complete about-face in characters' behaviors, and even though Lorcan learns to be a bit seductive, it's all a ploy to get Cassiopeia to lose.

Thank you so much for your compliments and for making me think of logical answers to your questions!! :)

~UnluckyStar57


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