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Review:MargaretLane says:
Yay, an entry.

Love the beginning of this story. You've really characterised her in a few lines and given her a very distinctive voice.

And I like the way you tell us James and Albus's jobs. It can be hard to get information like that across, since it's obvious to all your characters, but the way you've done it is really natural and flows really well.

The final two sections leave no spaces between the lines. It's not a big deal as the sections are short anyway, but might be easier to read, if there were breaks between them like in the first section.

Hmm, a prophecy about Willow. I wonder what it is.

I thought the whole prophecy thing was one of the more difficult options. Can't wait to see how you deal with it.

Making Lily into journalism works really well, as it makes it realistic that she would go digging into things.

I have a feeling the prophecy is going to end up being something minor and embarrassing. I don't know why. It's just a feeling I have.

Author's Response: Yes, an entry :D !

Thank you! Lily is very distinctive. She's not perfect, thinks a bit highly of herself (but who wouldn't, really, raised in a world that worships your entire family?) but she is a very 'out-there' sort of girl.

James and Albus aren't really pivotal characters, if you know what I mean, but I thought I'd ought to mention them, just to define Lily a bit more. She doesn't want to be like her brothers, she wants to be different.

Yes, I forgot to edit that (oops), sorry. I'll edit it (if I haven't already). Sometimes the chapter I post doesn't like me and either makes the gaps too big or not enough. But anyway...

Ah, the prophecy. It actually ties in with another story I have, but this is three years in the future. So, I thought it was one of the easier options for me.

Lily is just a really curious, sort of bossy gal. I thought that would tie in well.

And you'll have to wait and see!

Cheers, SW.

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