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Review:academica says:
Hi lovely ♥

Another cute chapter. I liked watching Autumn and Louis interact--it was sweet that he let her borrow his jacket because it's a classic romantic move. I also liked the letter because it gave us a glimpse of how things were going at home (something you don't often get with stories set at Hogwarts). It was nice to imagine Yuna settling into her new life.

The only thing I can really find to critique is that it feels like there isn't a central plot line tugging this along. Mostly what I've seen so far is lots of pranking, the beginnings of a romance between Autumn and Louis, and classic Hogwarts stuff like going to class and Quidditch games. I thought the situation with Fern going missing would be that little dash of mystery that tied everything together, but then she turned up, and so now the plot just seems a little bit aimless to me. Do you have something in mind for your next chapter to bring in some more action and give the story direction?

Nice work so far! As requested, I'll switch over to Reason to Fight next time it's my turn.

-Amanda

Author's Response: Okay this is getting answered before everything else because it's my four hundredth review!

You're absolutely right about there being no central plot, though I'm working on it, I promise. RL has just been getting perpetually in the way, and as someone tired of school, writing school scenes was horrible, as it didn't leave me much space to run away from reality for a moment, if that makes sense. But yes, there should be something to center the plot on, and it should be coming in future chapters, though I'm not sure when they'll be posted...

Thank you so much for your advice, I'll be getting back to Post Scriptum asap!


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