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Review:Debra20 says:
Oh wow, what an amazing chapter this turned out to be. You were very brave tackling Draco like this, and I'm glad you dared because I thought his characterization (both through his own thoughts and those belonging to Astoria) was excellently handled. Seriously, well done! You've succeeded where many others fail when it comes to writing Draco: finding that balance between his younger self and his matured self. What I think many people forget when writing Next Gen characters that were featured in the HP novels is that people change, but never completely. We morph when we're faced with different challenges in our life and we learn from them. We're never the same and yet our core remains. I've always thought that deep down, Draco was not a bad apple and there are many scenes during Half-Blood Prince and Deathly Hallows that stand testimony to my belief. Rather, he lacked a beneficial education and home environment that could have made him more sympathetic to those that weren't in the same position as his family. The way he was brought up and the examples he saw from his parents were what poisoned him, but not beyond salvation.

That's why I think you captured his essence, his real essence, in an amazing way here. He's still very, very proud up to the point of endangering his family rather than seek help (I reckon this will change further on into the story) and yet you can feel how much he's changed. His concern for his wife and loved ones is touching and so naturally human that you can't help but feel for him, despite all his past disastrous choices. And I'm glad that you've decided to show that even after ALL this time he's still being haunted by those mistakes (involvement with the Dark Lord). Many seem to brush it off quickly and re include him in society right away, like nothing ever happened, which is very difficult to believe. I need to see some struggle! :))

May I come to you when I have to write action/battle scenes? Because you seem to do wonders with it. Again, it's almost like reading JK herself! I'm terrible at writing action scenes and yet I am planning a First Wizarding story...see the irony? :P

Author's Response: Hi! Awesome to see you back!

I've really come to enjoy writing Draco. It's kind of ironic. He was far from my favorite character for the first 5 books. I thought he was very cliche as the spoilt-rotten rich kid who mostly runs around yelling, "My father will hear of this!" Then in HBP he changed. Became more complicated and interesting. A character that you could feel a certain amount of sympathy for, even though he pretty much earned the bad things that happened to him. I agree with you that some of his less admirable traits will never go away, but the war certainly would have changed his opinion about a great many things. So I'm very glad that you like the way I've portrayed him. It seems as though you've spend some quality time thinking through his character.

You're welcome to run things by me if you like. I'm pretty flattered that you think my fight scenes are that good. For me, it all boils down to setting the scene well and filling in enough of the details that the reader can easily visualize what's going on. That's what makes it immersive, and that's the key to good action sequences in writing.

I'm very, very pleased that you're enjoying the story. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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