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Review:_relative says:
Story name twin! Cool!

I like your beginning, it starts off with what you'd think of with rushing to get to the train, a very accurate portrayal I think.

And I like the portrayal of Louis here. I always thought he'd be sort of... er... I'm trying to think of a nice way to say this :P Well, I s'pose there isn't one. I always thought he'd be just like he is here, an arrogant little sod! It's sort of my mental image of him, being all veela-y and irritating.

I think it would benefit this chapter to have more description and that between the dialogue sometimes, 'cause it can run a bit fast. But I do like the dialogue. You don't skip over the details of conversations (like I do, oops) and manage to put them in without it sounding all boring and while characterising everybody in the process.

Fun start! How do you pronounce Lysander's nickname though? I keep wanting to read it "Liss" but it seems like "Lice" would make more sense 'cause that's the first syllable and all. It's a hard name to shorten, isn't it? :P

Well it's cool to find a story with the same name, and here I was thinking I was all original. I really like your summary though, I think it sums up the title really nicely. I kept trying to think up a way to do that, but I couldn't! I admit defeat!

Good luck with this superbly titled story :P

Author's Response: Your story has the same name? That's crazy! I thought I was being really original, too, so maybe we're both right! Haha.
I'm really happy you like how I started the story! I wanted to get right into things, and I thought the craziness of leaving for Hogwarts would be perfect! I always love how chaotic it is for Mrs. Weasley trying to get Harry and the gang to the platform on time, and wanted to recreate that feel with my story. Hopefully I did it justice!
I'm really having fun with Louis, so I'm so happy you like him! There is more to him than meets the eye, but of course we're seeing him through Darcy's eyes, so the arrogance does shine through quite a bit!
I think one reason the dialogue goes so quickly is because I'm just so excited while I'm writing it! Sometimes it's hard for me to go back and add more detail and really proofread, because I just want to get a chapter up! Haha.
Lysander's nickname is pronounced with a soft s, like a "z" sound. So Lize, I guess. It's weird writing it out how I pronounce it in my head! Haha. I hope that helps!
I'm so glad you liked the start to this story, and that you're a fan of the title ;) And thank you so much for wishing me luck! It means so much that you took time to leave me such a sweet review!
Cassie :)


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