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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi again! :)

So, this was another great and well-written chapter. I think you got the balance of heavy and humour just right. Poor Greta, suffering from anxiety and not being able to face it! :( I don't blame her for getting worked up among all these new people, especially surrounded by all the magic and magical folk!

Another thing I like is how we're seeing the story completely through Greta's eyes, giving it a limited point of view. While I know all the Weasley cousins, Greta of course doesn't, so they're just a mass of gingers and tea and shapes to her. It's a very unique way to write a story, especially about this lot, and you do it very nicely! :)

I had to laugh at Greta's fears that the ginger uncle had smuggled himself in, and her offers of giving up Astrid. I wonder, who is the uncle who doesn't like Astrid that she mentioned? Also, it's very awkward that she had a moment with Albus, and that he's the groom! Ah, what are the odds, she has so many cousins to choose from and it has to be Albus?! I'm excited to see how this unfolds! :)

Author's Response: I am being spoiled today, aren't I? Very well. I shan't complain. In fact, I shall dance.

-dances-

Balance, huzzah! That's the goal, yep. And I love playing with limited perspectives, it's so fun. I'm happy you like it too!

Teehee. The smuggled uncle. It plays on her fears of gingers and her not knowing anybody (and nobody knowing Astrid either). As for the uncle that doesn't like Astrid, there really isn't one, it's just what Greta's mind cooked up in a moment of panic. She doesn't like Astrid, so she tends to assume nobody else could really like Astrid either, even if they say they do. Greta pretty much thinks her perceptions are identical to reality, so the possibility of there being a mad uncle who wants to kill Astrid doesn't seem very far-fetched to her. She surrounds herself with that stuff, fantasy and weird things. Hence the mentions of dungeons and torture and that. Her realm of the possible is pretty big.

What are the odds indeed. I tried to make it sound still plausible that it'd be Albus rather than anyone else, which is explained more as Albus is characterised in more depth. He doesn't like seeing people sad, and he already feels close to Greta even though he hasn't met her, because that's the sort of person Albus is. He just cares about everybody. And he reckons he'll be seeing more of Greta now that he's marrying her sister, so he just leaps at the chance to bond.

I love writing Albus :P He's such a weird little thing.

Thanks for another great review!


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