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Review:_relative says:
OH WOW. FALLING DOWN STAIRS. I DO THAT A LOT.

But that's not why I decided to write this review. The reason is, I love your kind of style of "subtle foreshadowing" which sounds all funny but that's the only term I can think of. Like how you mention the woman with the flowers, and it seems like just some random detail, but then it comes into play later. You put the detail in early so it doesn't just seem like a Big Coincidence, but don't emphasise that it'll be important later. You make the detail memorable too, the flowers could possibly bite. It's funny, and useful as well. And you mentioned Seamus regrowing a toe earlier, which justifies the explanation of floor levels and gives your surrounding some extra oomph without being completely random. It makes sense for Edie to notice and comment about the things she does.

It makes it so the details you use aren't just random snippets, they all add to painting the lovely picture of the story. And they are sort of random, and funny, but they have also serve the purpose of adding depth in unexpected places. I really like that. A lot. I feel that way with loads of thing about this story actually. Including the goblin feminist thing. Is it weird that that's one of the things I'm really looking forward to in future chapters? I mean, the Oliver-Edie stuff is great, but you just have so many conflicts and plottage and all this stuff and you make it all relevant and interesting and GAH.

Basically, I love you, and I think you're brilliant.

That's the short version.

Author's Response: Oh my, you fall down stairs a lot? You should invest in some elbow-pads, at the very least!

GAAAH I am so stupidly overly-proud of my foreshadowing, hahaha. I feel like every single thing that happens needs to have a *reason* that it happened, so every time I plant a little bit of foreshadowing I just rub my hands together and cackle. So thanks for complimenting it??

Yay another Goblin Feminist fan!! That will, indeed, become an important part of this story in more ways than one :D

Thank you so much! ♥


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