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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hiya, Elphaba back again!

So, I really like the speculation about the meaning of the sorting hat's song in this chapter; its got me REALLY curious about what could be going on at Hogwarts.

I think this exchange between James and Lily maybe telegraphs a little bit too much of the mystery: "'If it were too bad it would've started warning us years ago. If there is any trouble, it's only just beginning' ... 'Well wouldn't it seem that if the hat is warning us this year, something has been building up to this point...'" I just don't know if it's necessary.

Characterization is pretty solid in this chapter, however, I think this statement seems slightly out of character for Professor McGonagall: "please try and stay away from them when it comes to mischief." I think she'd be more likely to tell the students to not get up to any mischief at all. :)

I like the suspense of the sorting ceremony, and got caught up in the questions over the hat's warning to Lily. What could it mean? I missed Molly and Albus's perspectives, though. I hope that future chapters will get back to them, and I wonder how they and Lily and Hugo's paths will cross at school. Will they end up working together to unravel the mystery of whatever trouble is going on? I think there's a lot of story potential there! :)

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked it! (The Sorting Hat song I mean lol) :) I always get so worried writing for the Ol' Sortie. He always has a purpose for what he says, and I was afraid I was just blubbering for a while. I'm glad it's struck your curiosity!

The only reason Lily and James' conversation there is necessary is because I didn't plan on bringing it up later. I wanted to show how she, as a first year was worried, and she'd bring it up to her older brother right away. I wanted to show the sense of a relationship there and their different views on the matter.

I'm relieved that characterization is good! :) It's always fickle with next generation characters because really, who are they other than a couple of pages worth of characters in the last book? But so many people have expectations (the same most of the time, too) about the kids, and they like to see them a way they like to think they'd be. I try and make sure I still portray them the way I see them, and that they're not totally unbelievable, so it's good to see that's coming out so far. :) I'll go back and fix the McGonagall phrase. :)

Molly and Albus are pretty much the "main" characters of the story, so they'll definitely be back! :) As for everything else, you'll have to see! :)

Thank you so much again for reviewing! I'm so glad that you're liking the story and that you feel there is an actual sense of mystery! I enjoy reading and responding to your reviews, they make me smile ear to ear! :) Thanks again!

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