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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello again! :)

Ah, the plot thickens! I really liked this chapter, and your compelling, elegant and detailed writing style did not disappoint. I love how you personify Morgan, as this fearsome being who loses control yet is so fragile and sensitive, and underneath it all really wants to be accepted and liked. The way Morgan fights with the magic of paint and makeup is very unique, and I can't wait to see how you'll continue it!

I really enjoyed the interaction with Morgana LeFay, and I'm very curious as to how she'll continue to figure in Morgan's story. The descriptions of the painting, how the blobs of colours mixed to form a breathing, speaking sort of woman, were very vibrant and really created an image of what Morgan must have been seeing. You've done an excellent job of 'showing,' not 'telling,' here.

NOT PEEVES! :( Well, I'm optimistic he'll be okay... somehow...

As for the twins befriending Morgan, I think that in the separation of what we know about each faction I wouldn't have imagined the friendship working. Yet somehow you make them fit so seamlessly and really rationalize their mutual attractions to each other. After all, both the twins and Morgan are creators of sorts, and their bizarre relationship really makes sense. I also think you write the twins very naturally, and they're exactly how I would imagine them with the right amount of depth and individual personalities.

There is never enough magical weirdness! :) And I'm really glad you're continuing this story, I still feel like the building blocks are being laid out and you have such an interesting beginning with well-developed themes and characters. Yes, there are a lot of sub-plots and many details but you seem to have such a clear vision of where this story is going, and I'm excited to see where you take it! :D

Author's Response: hi again!

The twins and Morgan work you say? *phew!* ugh i've been worrying about that ever since I came up with this story. For me, they make sense. I suppose the presence of Morgan must change the twins a little bit, makes their conscience a bit darker and more aware of the destructive power of the magic they so love to mess around with.

In a way, all three are outsiders. The twins because they have eachother and hence actually don't really need society for a sense of self. Morgan, well, she doesn't HAVE a consistent sense of self and therefore will never be able to fit in. All three want to change the world, or at least strongly believe in their ability to challenge the status quo through their creations. While the twins may be more fun and careless and Morgan more heavy handed and much too serious, these are qualities that are easily exchanged and learned from...I think :P

Oooh, yeah the Morgana LeFay scene was fun to write! I'm really impatient to start writing all the weird Morgana scenes, but first as you noted, all the blocks must be layed out - so frustrating XD

I totally killed Peeves! ahaha, no i didn't :p You know I didn't because Peeves never dies! When the planet finally explodes he will just float off into space and find an alien race to torment, I'm sure.

thanks for this great review, I'll be stalking your review thread soon with a rerequest ;)


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