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Review:CambAngst says:
This was really cute! I loved the way you wrote Arthur, with his boundless enthusiasm for learning about the muggles. A perfect rendition of the man before he became a husband and father.

Your description of the Muggle Studies classroom was detailed and very thorough. I liked your ideas about the sorts of things that a wizard teaching students about muggles would find interesting or useful.

Professor Bumble was a neat creation. I can't actually think of a Hogwarts professor from the era of the books to compare him to. Perhaps Hagrid in terms of his raw enthusiasm for the subject, but that doesn't sound right at all to compare him to a very rough-hewn half-giant. He runs a very interesting class. I liked the way that he managed to capture the attention of even the students who were less inclined to care about muggles. Something about the way the subject matter gripped them felt universal to me, like it could have been any fascinating subject in any school, muggle or magical.

The little bits of canon that you worked into the story added a lot for me. Seeing Molly in her school years, meeting a few of Arthur's contemporaries from the books and finding out when Arthur developed his burning desire to understand airplanes really helped to anchor the story in a familiar feeling.

Your writing was very good. I didn't see a single typo or grammatical problem.

Suggestions? I think it would have been interesting to add an antagonist to the scene. Maybe not a pureblood fanatical Slytherin, since they probably wouldn't be caught dead taking N.E.W.T. level Muggle studies, but maybe a pureblood Ravenclaw to ask dismissive questions or even argue that it isn't possible for muggles to fly. I would have loved seeing Arthur's reaction to such a thing.

Overall, you did a great job with this. Glad I saw it in your status update!

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm so glad you liked Arthur! He's one of my favourite characters, especially when he acts like a big kid and doesn't want to discipline his kids as much as Molly. I really enjoyed describing the Muggle Studies classroom, and the research I did about sixties toys to include there. I've always thought that even though Arthur's job is so connected with Muggles, he doesn't seem to know that much about them, so it was interesting to think about what he learnt in school.

I had so much fun creating Professor Bumble! I'm pleased he didn't seem like a copy of any of the Hogwarts professors. I think if a teacher is obviously enthusiastic about that subject, the class is much more likely to be interested in what they're teaching, and I tried to show that here. It was a bit strange trying to explain how all the things we take for granted work, though!

Something I always try to do - especially in stories like this one - is add some mention of bits of canon we know to kind of anchor the story more for the reader. I'm happy it worked for you, because I always think it makes it more believable for the reader.

That's a really good idea! I'd thought of having an antagonist at first, but the obvious choice of a pureblood Slytherin didn't really work, so I like the idea of a know-it-all Ravenclaw stirring things up in the class. I'll definitely think about adding that in!

Thank you so much for a brilliant review - it really made my day!

Sian :)

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