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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
HEY!

Hey, lovely, its Gabbie here with your review and omygoshlikereally you read Cassandra Clare? have you read the latest in the Mortal Instrument--*ahem* that's not what this is about! Hahaha.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this one-shot! I don't find many stories centered on Lucy, Molly or Roxanne Weasley on the forums and this is a nice and very welcome change. I think her character gets sort of pushed to the side since most stories are about Rose or Lily and i think that's a real shame.
Your Lucy is written in a very relatable way and I was able to understand her very well. I think you gripped all the bitterness, longing and sadness of growing up with a famous family amazingly. She feels more real to me than some of the other depictions that I've read and the relationships you built up with she and her cousins was detailed enough but no so overly much that I wanted to know so much more.
Lily and Rose were two characters that I thought you strayed away from being "perfect" so brilliantly, I love a Weasley/Potter girl with flaws. ;)
Lucy herself seems like a very practical girl but there's so much chance for character growth here that I would love to read more about her.
Anyway, as for her turning into a vampire and your descriptions of that--well, that was pretty awesome! I think on some parts you should watch out for some run on sentences and slow down just a tad but otherwise, no issue at all with it.
The reveal of her talking to Hugo about her change and what will be happening to him soon gave me the chills. Just something so dark and lovely and wonderful about what you did there and well, when is this becoming a full story? I'll be on it like a liar in church. HAHAHA.
Aside from what I mentioned, no other CC's! This was really great!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: HI GABBIE! :D

Haha, I've only read the first four books, the fifth is on my to-read list! :)

Yup, when I first came up with the idea, I wanted a vampire that wasn't a Potter or a Granger-Weasley, and Lucy was one of the first to spring to mind, particularly as there's so little known about her. :)

Thank you so much! I'm so excited that you were able to relate to her so well (especially as she's on the slightly crazy side :P) and that you felt I portrayed her accurately - I hope this continues! ♥

Rose is my rebel, and I think Lily is affected by fame in a similar way to Lucy, but her reaction is different (if that makes sense?) I'm glad I was able to avoid the cliches though - I love flaws too ;)

EEE yes! I hope you like Lucy's personality in future chapters :D

Thanks so much! I'll keep an eye out for those pesky run-on sentences - I think it's just the story running away with me ;)

WOOO the fact that you had the chills is great to hear as an author! Bite Club is actually a novella now - there's two chapters of it up *cackles*

Thanks so much!

-Isobel ♥


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