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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there! I decided come back and re-tag seeing how much Rachel loved this story I wanted to check it out too :P First things first, Iím really glad of the length of the chapter. Iím quite a fan of short chapter because they donít drag and youíre more focused on where the stories going due to the length and it worked really well here :)

Though I enjoyed the Psychology of Gobstones, I feel as if youíre more at ease in this story and the style suits you a lot more. This may just be me liking descriptive stories, and there was a lot more description in this chapter, so I might have been a little biased here. However, you managed to create a unique style in both of the stories and thatís not something I can often say, so kudos to you.

I couldnít resist but include some of my favourite descriptions :P I really liked this Ďflaunting youth in their hollow facesí and it created some really powerful imagery. Then there was this Ďlost in my own tangled thoughtsí even though that line had the potential to become a clichť one, it didnít which was really great.

Your characterisation of Persephone (great name!) was really great. It was strong and consistent throughout the chapter and I grew to like her in the short space of time. I donít know what it is, but she just seemed to be different to most OCs and that difference drew me in. Iím also intrigued to see how she fits into the Harry Potter universe, because I donít think Iíve ever read a story about an OC which isnít directly connected to a canon.

The sense of mystery in this chapter was really great. Iím hoping that The Society is some sort of secret cult, because that would be a really cool storyline. Or it could be something else, ah I love hypothesising way too much so Iím going to stop now before my review turns into a massive one! I liked the introduction of Arnold too, and it will be interesting to see how he has a connection with Persephone.

Overall, I thought that was an excellent start to the story and I can really see why Rachel liked it so much :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi! I am SO sorry that I took so very long to respond to this review!!

Thanks for all of your lovely compliments, and for giving this little story a try! It really means a lot to mean, because this was my first-ever attempt at fanfiction. :)

I think that, though I like to read humor stories most of all, I'm probably better at writing in the darker genres, like horror, mystery, and angst. Thank you for saying that I have a unique style!! Sometimes I worry that I get too weird with my writing, but I'm very glad to know that you think it's unique. :D

Persephone is a very different name, and it's one that I have plans for! After all, the Persephone of mythology was taken away from her mother to be the King of the Underworld's wife. I'm going to try to draw parallels between her story and my own character's story. She doesn't connect to canon yet, but don't worry, in time, she'll meet one of the greatest wizards of all time--except he'll be much younger than he is when we meet him in the Harry Potter books. ;)

Thank you for hypothesizing! There will definitely be more about what the Society is in ensuing chapters! :)

Thanks so much for your review!! I'm sorry that I took so long to respond.

~UnluckyStar57


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