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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Well, this is certainly an international story!! I'm here with the review you requested, and now I'm kicking myself for having not discovered your writing much sooner!!

First of all, I'm loving the fact that you made Alice and Frank so different from each other. She, the eccentric, retiring one, and he, the confident, brave one. In most Fralice stories I've seen, Frank is usually just as shy and strange as Alice, but then again, most of the stories that I've seen with Fralice are usually focused on the Jily ship. It was really cool to see such an unexplored relationship in the foreground, and you show it with such vivid, heartbreaking detail!! The story of how they came to be together is definitely intriguing, and it makes me wonder how he came to love her in the first place.

I definitely recognized the "Alice in Wonderland" allusions, especially towards the end. The way you intertwined those symbols and details with your own story was simply amazing and gravity-defying. I love the fact that she was called "Mad Alice," and at the end of her life, she is still mad, but in a different sort of way.

Your phrases are awesome and they seem to contain loads of magic within themselves. I particularly enjoyed the following:

"Words turned to stony garble when they hit her tongue."
"...love affair of black coffee in bed, duelling practice followed by tickle wars..."
"Frank had eyes that either seemed to know everything and see nothing, or see everything and know nothing."

The phrases, especially the sentence about Frank, just had something really special in them. I couldn't say exactly what, but it was awesome. Also, the part about Frank's eyes reminded me of the occulist's eyes on the billboard in F. Scott Fitzgerald's The Great Gatsby. Did you intend to make this connection, or am I just seeing things? :)

The only thing that I found to be a tad bit off was the choice of the word "upmost" in the phrase "upmost protection." I've never heard the word "upmost," though I could be wrong and it might certainly exist. I think that the word you were looking for is "utmost," which means, basically, "to the highest extent, the fullest measure." That's just my own definition-of-sorts, so by no means do you have to change it. It was just the one teensy little thing that jumped out at me.

Well, needless to say, you've done a brilliant job, and I commend you for being highly fantastic. Very, very well done!!! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi! :) Aw, you are just too sweet, reviewing so quickly and such a lovely and thorough review at that!

I'm glad you liked Alice and Frank, and that their personalities contradicted the usual portrayal. I loved imagining them, and now I just want to write more about their relationship! You're right, they usually take a back seat to Jily, but their story is just as interesting and tragic.

Ah, I'm so happy you liked the Alice in Wonderland allusions! I was worried they might be a bit much, but couldn't imagine writing about Alice and being mad without them. :) I definitely need to re-read Alice in Wonderland and make sure I got everything right!

Thank you so much for pointing out your favourite phrases, that really makes me so excited! :D I really enjoyed playing around with words here and knowing you picked out those sentences makes me a very happy writer! :)

Excellent point about upmost, I shall make sure to re-visit that! :) I have a habit of making up words and putting them where they don't belong, haha!

Thank you for this wonderful review! You are awesome! :D


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