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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I'm here again for the Blue vs. Bronze review battle. :)

I'm going to be honest with you... I actually read the rest of this story one day shortly after I reviewed your first chapter--It was just too good for me to NOT come back to! But I didn't review, and so now I'm going to make up for that! :D

I love how you've established the sibling dynamic between Daphne and Astoria. Though they haven't lived close together for many years, somehow they still know each other. Daphne doesn't seem too resentful that Astoria showed up out of the blue, she understands that Astoria was pulling herself out of a bad situation. And even though her arrival interferes with Theo and dinner, Daphne willingly gives her a place to sleep. It's the kind of relationship that I wish I had with my sister, but I don't.

Your description and scene-setting is marvelous. I like how you give us bits of information that are important, and leave the rest to the imagination. Seriously, may I visit the Pink Hippogriff? Since it doesn't exist, I think you should open one. With magic and stuff. You ARE a wizard, right? :)

...Ahem. Anyways...

Theo sounds really adorable, nerdy, and sweet. It's really awesome that he defies the Death Eater stereotype and has gone to work against people that he hung around with at Hogwarts. I can't wait to see where his and Daphne's relationship goes... I hope it heads in the direction of love and other things, but I can't be too hopeful. After all, Daphne just had to cancel dinner! And I hope that Theo likes her back just as much as she likes him, because I think they would be good for each other.

And how could I not mention the big reveal of Astoria's soon-to-be-ex-husband?! Adrian Pucey?! That's amazing! I remember thinking at the end of chapter one that it would be Draco, but you've got other plans in mind. :) Adrian is, if I remember correctly, a very minor Slytherin character, maybe on the Quidditch team at Hoggy Hoggy Hogwarts? I think it's brilliant that you've pulled him out of the woodwork to play a big role in this story. It's very unique and original of you! :)

Another awesome chapter! Hopefully I'll be back later to review more! :D

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm sorry for the belated response!

Oh, I'm so glad that you've been reading and enjoying this! Really, that's great to hear!
What you say there about Daphne and Astoria is *exactly* what I hoped people would get, so naturally it's pretty amazing to hear! They're no longer close, but there's not getting rid of that childhood bond!

I have to admit that since writing this, I've become of overpowered with the desire to create a Pink Hippogriff of my own. Cos, yeah, I'm totally a wizard ;) hehe

Aww yes, that's exactly how I wanted Theo to come across. You'll have to wait and see about any lurve between Theo and Daphne, but I do like happy endings, so yeah! I'm glad you think they'd be good for each other! (I do too :P)

Wow you're observant! Yes, Adrian is a magnificently minor character who I thought would do for Astoria. One of the things I love about JKR's world is how all the names, and the families connect up, so I was trying to stay true to that...

I'm soso glad that you liked this, and took the time to leave such an awesome review! It's one of those really amazing reviews, because all the things you've picked up on seem to be exactly the things I was trying to get across. So thank you! And I hope you enjoy the next chapters...! ♥ ♥

-Bethany


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