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Review:Calypso says:
Hey there!

I love the way the story's developed in this chapter... it's all very intriguing! I continue to be in awe of the way you can handle so many main characters and have them all feel so complex, and I just love the way the drama of the group's task is unfolding next to their personal dramas...

There's something very atmospheric- almost nostalgic- to the way you write, that makes me feel as if I'm actually there with your characters. I love that way you've included the little snippets of French which make it clear that the story is set in France and the characters are speaking a different language without confusing the reader- even one like me who only learnt French for three years!

I'm very curious as to what's gone on in Jean's family so that he's happy to kill his own uncle- and from the story of the attempt to stab him, it doesn't seem like the first time! I really like how you've continued to emphasise in this chapter just how ruthless these people are, even though we're coming to like them and everything.

As I said above, I like how you're bringing personal aspects of the characters into the story. The scene in the lighthouse between Camille and Xavier was so beautiful and romantic, and I loved the way you wrote them together, so that I'm totally shipping them now! :P Having read that scene, it was so sad to see their rather less pleasant feelings towards each other now, and I'm desperate to find out what caused such a rift between them...

Your descriptions of Simon's concentration camp are chilling- you really bring across how harsh and degrading it must have been, but at the same time how Simon has just become accustomed to it and taken it in his stride. And the way he looks after his sisters is really touching ♥ I really hope that they'll be okay!

And eugh that poison sounds awful! I can't wait to hear how their attempt at his life will go, and will definitely be back for the next chapter when I get the chance! This is such a great story :)

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hello again :)

Erm, well, I think me handling them all is a bit of an exaggeration, as the characterisations sometimes overlap (to the point where it takes me a while to realise), but thank you! I'm happy you think the inclusion of personal drama works well: a lot of WW2 stories (not fanfiction) seem to forget that the people who fought were human, with fears and hopes and flaws.

Jean's past will be brought up again later, I promise! Your comment about them being ruthless yet likeable is exactly what I was aiming for, so again thank you for the compliment.

Oh, Camille and Xavier. You find out in chapter five what drove the rift between them, and I hope you'll like the explanation! Don't worry about them too much, I really love them and don't want anything to happen to them quite yet (and now I need to stop before I spill everything, as tempting as that sounds).

Oh, Simon. The camp scenes are so difficult to write, but it's simply something I can't not write about. It wouldn't be fair to all those who really had to go through it.

Thank you again so much for another lovely review!


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