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Review:Calypso says:
Hello, here from the Ravenclaw Review Battle!

Ooh, it was interesting to meet Amy! I like how you're showing Viktor and Amy independently first, before (I assume!) bringing them together. It's nice to learn something of them before they meet each other, and it's a good way of giving some of their backstory.

Amy seems like quite a character- I feel very sorry for her, having such a controlling family and not being allowed to make her own life decisions, it must be very tough. I would have loved to have seen her feelings towards them explored a bit more... does she resent their control? Does it stop her getting on with them normally? I also think that maybe you could try and display some of Amy's character traits as the story progresses, rather than telling us everything now. Just an idea.

I really liked your description of Amy here: "She wasnít beautiful but she had grace and charm that made her so attractive" as it made her seem very realistic, and human. And I think that more often, it is attributes like "grace and charm" that make people attractive, rather than just their physical appearance. So well done for that!

I like Amy's carefree, rather flippant appraoch to life, and especially to marriage- it seems to fit with what else we know of her personality. The description of her escaping the house was great- you built the suspense really well- as in the first chapter, I liked the little details you put in, like about her rubber-soled shoes. It made it very vivid.
I also liked that she did have some regrets about leaving her parents. However wayward she is, I'd have found it hard to believe that she didn't feel anything for them, so that was a good addition!

Another thing I enjoyed was the note you ended this chapter on, with all Amy's hopes for the future. I'm curious as to what will happen to her and Viktor next!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hey Bethany! Glad you're back for the next chap!

I wanted to explore Viktor and Amy independently just to let the readers know how different they are. I didn't plan to write Amy's backstory, but I had to state the reason of her running away. But you're right. I should edit out some part of it and put it in the future chapters. It'd be fun to explore Amy through Viktor's eyes.
I didn't use to be good at detailing, so your compliment makes me smile helplessly. =] I'm so glad my writing skills are developing!
Thanks for the wonderful review! Hope to see you back soon! :D


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