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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!

I liked this chapter a lot. I loved how you started off with the description of the Minister's office and then bam! There were Death Eaters killing Scrimgeour. It was good action, and very well written. One thing I wasn't sure about; in TDH, Voldemort rose to power, but kept in the shadows a lot, to scare people. The Rules of Compliance Thicknesse wrote made it pretty obvious Voldy had come into power. I don't know if it's meant to be that way, but I just thought I'd point it out. :)

I loved how the Weasleys had that little 'remembrance' session for Ginny, it was really sweet and touching. And Charlie and Tamsin! Geez, I can't decide if this is good or bad timing.

The description vs. dialogue was fine, as ever. Your descriptions of places are very vivid, so I enjoyed reading that quite a lot.

And the end! Cliffy alert! Now I want to read on to see what everything means and gah.

Anyway, overall this was a really good chapter that left me hanging.

PS-I just remembered that Draco played quite a large part in the first chapter, but then he hasn't appeared again. Is it meant to be like that?

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I spent some time considering how to change the rules of compliance and still keep Arthur able to warn Ron and Hermione. I have an idea that may work a little better and keep Voldemort's rise to power ambiguous.

I have little hints that I'm including here and there so the end will make sense. :)

I looked back through and realized that Draco had gone into hiding a little too well. :) I've started back at the beginning to add his storyline back into story, though he is spending most of his time trying to remain hidden.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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