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Review:CambAngst says:
Brilliant. You did an amazing job of taking us through the formative years of Draco's young life.

Lucius and Narcissa were very well written. I loved the duality of both parents, the way that the behave around little Draco compared to the face they show the world. Then Lucius gradually changes as Draco gets older. He becomes colder and more distant, focused only on Draco's role in perpetuating the family legacy. I wonder whether the death of Draco's little sister had anything to do with the change we see in Lucius? It obviously impacted Narcissa. I like the idea of her suffering a loss like that. Not because I wish bad things on her, but because it helps to round out the picture of why she was always so fiercely protective of Draco.

I liked the change in Draco's perspective as he got older, as well. How he went from being a precocious, free-spirited toddler to more of a haughty young man. It's easy to see how all of his father's "lessons" came to echo in his ears.

Your writing was awesome in this. I couldn't find a thing wrong with it. The narrative flowed beautifully and the characters really sounded like themselves.

Great job!

Author's Response: Again, what an amazing review! You're wonderful! Poor Draco would have had a fairly lonely childhood, growing up as a spoiled only child, so I figured I'd go a little more into that. I always thought that Narcissa's protectiveness went above and beyond the norm, and to me, the most logical explanation for this would be the loss of a child earlier in her life. Embedded sorrow, plus the ingrained need for an heir would mean that she would be super protective. I thought that Lucius would have similar feelings, but duty would probably win in his case. Thus, the obsession with lineage which he passed on to his son. And poor Draco just got molded into what his father wanted. Thank you for the lovely review. It's very helpful, and it was lovely to read :)

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