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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Wow, poor Abigail!! I really feel sorry for her, no matter how rich she is.

Before I go into bashing her parents' buying-for-love games, I must say, the outfit that she put on at the beginning sounded really pretty. I wish I could have it! Of course, it probably looks better on her. :)

Now, on to bashing the parents. I think it's really sick that they think they have to play that sort of cat-and-mouse game with her, buying her things in return for her love. They can't just be satisfied with her companionship and her genuine love, no. They have to manufacture it themselves, practically begging her in the most expensive way possible in order to win in the game of love. It IS understandable, though, that they, as two very rich people, would do something like that. Props to you for writing it realistically!!

I liked how you mentioned Seamus Finnegan and put the explosives element of him into Scarlett. Honestly, I don't think I drew the connection until then, but I'm glad it's there. :)

The one complaint I have is that when you were talking about blowing up the Hogwarts bridge, you wrote: "blew up the bridge the Hogwarts." I'm not quite clear on what that was supposed to say, but that was the only thing that I found somewhat lacking.

When it rains, it pours, as they say. So Abigail is just sitting there, waiting for Blaise to show up, and he has the gall to not only NOT show up, but to send a (late!) owl saying that he had "family stuff."

Yeah, "family stuff." It sounds to me like dearest Blaise is like Hannah Montana--leading a double life, isn't he!! I'm pretty sure that he's cheating, and I'm really wondering who he's cheating on Abigail with.

Excellent chapter!! Second chapters are difficult, but now that you're through it, think how fun all the rest of them will be! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi! So sorry for the late reply!

Haha, I love her outfits - I only wish I could have them in my closet as well!

There are a lot of different takes on how divorce affects the children in FF, but the whole money-for-love thing is something I've never come across except in OF, so I decided to include that in this story, because it seems realistic with two very wealthy parents.

That little connection was very fun to make, actually. :)

Oops! Ack, I will go fix that!

Blaise definitely is hiding something - what he's hiding though, you'll have to wait to find out!

I'm very excited for chapter 3 - it's almost done, and it was so much easier to write than this one!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)



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