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Review:MargaretLane says:
You've talked about a sleeping drought at one point. I assume you mean a sleeping draught.

Really like the way you portray his flashbacks. It makes sense that he'd be affected by what he was forced to do and what he witnessed.

I also like the fact that he was forced to see a psychologist because the Ministry wants to make sure he can be trusted. Considering how they trusted people like Lucius in the past and turned out to be badly mistaken, that makes a lot of sense.

I'm not sure how the wizarding world works, obviously, but the comment about him planning on going to "school" seemed a bit out of place. After all, he's an adult. He's finished school. I know that in the U.S., people sometimes use "school" to mean "college", but I don't think they do in England and the wizarding world doesn't really seem to have universities exactly. Percy went straight into the Ministry from school, after all. I'd be inclined to say something more like "eventually he hoped to train to do something more in the wizarding world".

It's interesting that he's taking Muggle sleeping pills, but I think it works well. It kind of indicates another change in his thinking.

I also like the way Ron and Hermione don't trust him immediately. I'm guessing they'll begin to see he's changed as time passes, but it's the sort of thing that should develop gradually and it looks like it will. Or of course, I could be wrong and they might never come to trust him at all, which would make sense too, considering everything he's been involved in over the years.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I had not caught those and thank you so much - I'm waiting on my beta to read the story and get back to me, but I wanted to begin posting the story because of the length it takes to validate them at times. Again, thank you so much for the review! It means the world.

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