|Review:||Elphaba and Boyfriends says:|
Hi Elphaba here, sorry for taking so long to get to this review.
I like that this chapter spends a significant amount of time following Noah. It's interesting to see his perspective on things, and to get his side of the drama with Molly.
It seems like an awfully big coincidence for his little sister to overhear wizards talking about the trouble at Hogwarts during her rugby match; I wonder if there is some connection between some of the muggles at the match and the people behind the scheme?
I really like Harry's reassuring talk with Lily before she gets on the train: "I wish I could make it easier on any of our family, but people just don't understand that people like you and I went and go through exactly what they go through." I think that's great wisdom to share with her. :)
There are a lot of characters in this chapter, and it feels like some of them, like Addy, haven't been completely fleshed four, yet. I think there's a lot of potential for Addy and James, but I also would like to get to know her better as a character as the story progresses. For instance, what makes her stand out from the other characters, and what about James is attractive to her?
The breakup between Noah and Molly wasn't a shock, but it seemed a bit abrupt. I wonder what made Molly decide to break up with him? Will her reasons be fleshed out later on? Does her decision have anything to do with the secret meeting she eavesdropped on?
Moving on to chapter four to see what happens next; my review will be coming within the next day or so. :)
Author's Response: Hi, sorry it's taken a while to respond! I appreciate the review, I really do! :D
I really love Noah. He's a great guy, and writing for him is always fun. Though I have some stuff in store for him later, so his time in the lime light has not ended! :)
As for the Rugby match, I really hated the way I introduced the big secret to Noah, but it was the only way I could think of doing it at the time. I don't really like changing things much, so I haven't gone back to change that bit of the story, but I always just figured someone was at the match watching a child or friend or something and they were Wizards lol.
I LOVE writing older Harry Potter generation. Someday I'll write a story about the trio all grown up, but I always end up just adding bits of them as parents in my stories. It's always so much fun to add a bit of wisdom, their new traits, their old memories, and how they grow up. I'm glad you liked Harry! :)
Addie is so super fun! I hope that you'll come to see she has a bigger part in the upcoming chapters! :) She's like a big four year old who has to have her way (though we still got to love her for it I think)
The reason Molly broke up with Noah is because she doesn't believe they should be in love yet. Though, there will be a chapter later on in which I add why Molly has such strong views on love, but that's the reason why she does it. There's nothing more to it, other than she wants to break apart from him if he loves her now, she'd only hurt him more if she let it continue.
Thank you very much for the review and I'm so sorry it took so long to get to! I greatly appreciate it! Real life has just been in the way, you know? :)