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Review:CambAngst says:
Gah! This can't be the end!!!

OK, it's the end. Deep breath. I can handle this. :) Especially because there are good things in the works.

For whatever reason, I expected this to be more of a "wrap up" chapter, so imagine my surprise when I was plunged right into the middle of a firefight in the first paragraph. Now I see why you made a point of "re-introducing" all of the former members of the Order and Dumbledore's Army a few chapters back. It's great to see that they were all ready to spring into action when the time came. There were a few things I really liked about the way that you described the forces of good. For one thing, it's apparent that they all responded to Hermione and Ginny's call to arms. They don't seem like "Harry Potter's Private Army", if that makes sense. I see that a little too often in fan fiction. I liked the idea of Bill and Fleur being so concerned with Teddy's well-being. Fleur is an underrated presence in Next Gen stories, at least in my opinion. Lastly, I liked the teamwork and the obvious concern that the members of the Order and the D.A. had for one another.

“I am Hermione Weasley’s daughter. We are highly logical.” she replied simply, making Harry smile. “So this is the Elder Wand, huh?” -- Ha! She almost sounds like Spock here. But in an endearing sort of way.

I was... hmmnnn... I'm not completely sure how I felt about "the Aurors" coming back to the Burrow for breakfast. If you're just talking about Harry, Ron, Teddy, Scorpius and Freddy, that would make sense. If it's literally all of the Aurors, that would feel a bit cliche. Either way, I think you should clarify who's there. I did love the idea of the whole family pulling together to hug and reconnect and celebrate their survival. That was a very Weasley thing to do.

And then the ending, with Harry offering Rose a job. Wherever did you get that brilliant idea? :p

Oh, Ral, I have enjoyed this story so! You did a great job with it, start to finish, and it was a joy to follow along. Thanks for the shout out, and I'll be looking for your new story soon. Awesome story!

-Dan

Author's Response: I know I am eons late responding to this but thank you! Thank you so much not only for this review, but for all the constant feedback and support and all the good advice that I really appreciated and tried to put to good use! I hope it shows!

I was so out of my element 15 chapters ago when I started writing and now I feel like these characters are part of my life and I can play around with them as much as I want, cause I know what they will and won't do!

I always intended to have a battle scene, but I never wrote one and I struggled endlessly with it. I'm happy the result was something somewhat resembling an actual battle!

As for the Order and D.A., they will be featured massively in the sequel, that right now appears to be a very long novel! I can't wait to see what you think about it!

Again, thank you so much! Your reviews just put the biggest smile on my face! :)


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