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Review:marauderfan says:
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I like Brienne's interactions with the characters we know - saw Malfoy in there for sure, with his "when my father hears about this!" comments haha. (Loved that Brienne called him a spoiled princess, too) And I think Luna is a perfect person to meet for someone who's new and has just dealt with death in the family (I'm assuming that's why she's so detached in this chapter, given the story summary.)

It'll be interesting to see Brienne's comparisons between Hogwarts and Beauxbatons, which she's done a bit of in this chapter but I'm sure she'll have more to say when all the uncivilised aspects of Hogwarts (i.e. Peeves) show up!

I think your characterisation of the canon characters is generally good. There were a couple of things Luna said that seemed a bit OOC ("How old are you, may I ask?" sounds a bit formal and polite for her.) But I loved how she was talking about pie when the Dementors showed up - I think that is very Luna :)

This is a good first chapter, you did a good job setting the story up. Great work!

Author's Response: Hi!

Haha, yeah that's Malfoy all right, I couldn't bear not including him for just one little piece of my story. I enjoyed writing Luna too, though it's quite hard to get her whimsical nature down right without being too ridiculous.

Thanks for pointing out that line, I'll try to make it more Luna-ish :)

Thank you very much for this review :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.


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