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Review:800 words of heaven says:
HELLO FROM REVIEW TAG, ONCE AGAIN!

I just realised how aggressive all of my greetings from review tag sound. That aside, I am looking forward to seeing where all of this goes. I miss reading your stuff.

This was super short, and I think it worked for what I think you were trying to do. It seemed like a short, snappy introduction, to a snappy sort of story, and gave a bit of an insight into the way Lily and her life works.

That being said, I did find it a bit incoherent and jumpy in a few places. This may be because I haven't read the one-shots that accompany this, so I was a bit lost.

Aside from the choppy flow, though, I think this holds a lot of potential for some fluffy and crazy shenanigans and capers. I can already tell that Rose is going to have the worst time out of the lot!

Author's Response: Personally I think your greetings are cheerful and hyper which in turn makes me cheerful an hyper. Skfnekneksjfn are the only words that I can say to describe how flattered I am.

I didn't know how to start the story originally but I knew that I definitely didn't want to jump right into the action so I ended up with something that was more like a prologue.

I'll have to see if I can fix the choppy flow. I'm sure that it has nothing to do with the other one-shots. I don't think it's absolutely necessary to read them in order to understand the story.

Thanks for the helpful feedback!


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