MY HEART HURTS NOW
This was beautiful, Pearl. You've written this so well, your dialogue is excellent and your descriptions, as always, are absolutely wonderful.
I don't know what you meant about your romance scenes are childish because this was just beautiful! You've captured the emotion so well, and I love the way you've portrayed Cho's and Cedric's relationship.
In your author's note, you've said that Rowling made Cho a horrible person in Order of the Phoenix. What you must remember is that it's in Harry's POV, and Harry was an angsty, 15 year old boy who had a tantrum that whole book. :p I don't think she intended to make her horrible, it's just that Harry was frustrated that Cho was still hung-up on Cedric - he's a boy, he doesn't understand. :p
I'll be on the lookout for Superheroes! ;D
Anyway, I absolutely loved this one-shot, I love seeing how much you improve! I feel like a proud mother haha. :'D
Author's Response: Oh, keyboard smashes. Kayla, don't be sad! :(
I'm glad I've managed to do well with the dialogue on this one. Dialogue has always been, if not, my biggest weakness in writing. And shucks...my descriptions...thank you for the compliments dearie!
And I dunno, I just always feel a bit insecure when writing romance and fluffy scenes, like they're not good enough. They're not exactly my biggest strong point, as opposed to my dark and angst fics. I feel like I'm at home when I write those. Happy fics I suppose are just not familiar territory for me. Of course, this wasn't exactly a happy fic, but the fluffiness in the beginning, I admit, I felt uncomfortable writing it. It took me forever to come up with something that felt somewhat right. And of course I killed the fluffiness with that ominous line..
And I'm glad that you found the way I captured their relationship rather well. I adore them as a couple. I like to think of a happy, smiling Cho, versus the a sniffling one.
And yes, Harry's POV. I do have to consider that, don't I? I have to admit, his frequent tantrums throughout book five annoyed me from time to time, but it's understandable. You're right. Rowling didn't intend to make Cho so horrible, she did it in the eyes of Harry, which after you explained it, makes sense. Boys do tend to be a little dense with the way a girl thinks.
And Superheroes. As for right now, it's only edits, but the construction of chapter 13 is a slow one. Juggling so many stories right now, of course, my fault for not being able to control my flooding ideas. -_-
But yes! Superheroes! I'm excited to be working on it again. It's been waay to long, and I only got my motivation after watching Iron Man three and seeing the preview for Thor 2. (Loki's hair is so laughable!)
And I'm happy that you're happy. :) I try my best to improve, and I'm glad to hear that you're seeing the progress!