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Review:patronus_charm says:
I meant to catch up with this the other day and then I saw your status about reviews and it reminded me :P And thereís two chapters up as well. Iím meant to be revising so Iíll probably on read one now, but Iíll be back for the other :)

I literally just did this myself Ė ĎJust good, English breakfast tea, elegant yet comforting, with one of her mini digestive biscuits on the side.í I totally get where Daphneís coming from, and now itís making me crave more tea and biscuits!

I got really excited seeing Adrian Pucey as I always wanted to know what Astoriaís husband looked like. When they were sitting I felt it was so awkward and you wrote awkwardness really well, as it made me cringe and what to hide behind something as opposed to reading on. In fact, I thought you got all the emotions/reactions really well in that chapter, especially Theoís when he was sticking up for Pansy and I couldnít help but aw over him.

I have to disagree with Daphne for once with this line ĎEven she had to admit that the blood traitor arguments were getting old.í They were old when they began! Oh well, itís nice to see that she isnít siding with them as I was intrigued about what she was going to do. I really like the idea that Pansyís taken on the role of evil ringleader as Iíve never seen her take it on before. In all the stories Iíve read itís been Blaise for some reason so this is a nice change :)

Ooh we got to find out more about her father. I wondered what had happened to him so it was nice seeing it here. I really liked the backstory you gave him, as it showed that he was a complex character and I got that in the feelings Daphne felt towards him.

Yay Dracoís here! I literally squealed when he spoke up, due to me maybe being a little bit in love with him or cough Tom Felton cough. Then when he came out with this line Ďyour arguments are about as hollow as Ginny Weasleyís headí I squealed again as it was nice to see weíre united in our hate for Ginny.

Then when Astoria chimed in it was great and I can see the foundations of their relationship even if he should be with me :P The whole staring at each other and Astoria asking him to go out with her was perfect as Iíve never seen her being the instigator in this relationship before but I really like the change and I think it suites her a lot more.

That was a great chapter Bethany, and Iíll forget about revision for a little longer so I can read the next chapter!

-Kiana

Wow looking over the review it somehow ended up to be insanely long!

Author's Response: Hello there! It's lovely to see you back- and thankyou for such a wonderful, insanely long review! ♥

Hehe well she is English, I had to get a few tea references in there!

I'm so glad that you thought the awkwardness between Adrian and Astoria came off well- although if it made you want to hide instead of reading, it's possibly a bit counter-productive? :P I'm glad you aw'd over Theo. I aw'd over him while I was writing it, but I don't think it counts if it's just the author doing it- so thanks for mentioning that!

I definitely agree with you about the blood traitor arguments, but unfortunately Daphne hasn't had all the advantages of being shown how awful they are. I liked the idea of Pansy as an evil ringleader, as in fanfiction she's normally just shown as Draco's adoring girlfriend- also I thought she'd play better against Daphne...

Oh good, I'm glad you like the backstory about Daphne's dad!

Hey, not fair, I want Draco/Tom Felton! :P Ahh I'm glad you liked the line about Ginny, and that you can see the attraction between him and Astoria- I'm not sure that she'd have been happier with being anything but the instigator here, to be honest!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed this. You always write such awesome reviews, they make me so happy! And who needs to do revision anyway? :P ♥

-Bethany


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