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Review:Calypso says:
Hello there- I'm here from the forums! (And this is my hundredth review! :D) I know you said you'd prefer feedback on Chapter Two of this, but I thought I might as well leave a review for Chapter One as well- particularly as this looks like such an interesting story! ♥

Awww- your young Sirius is so cute! It was nice, because I could see features of the adult Sirius in him, but there was a much more innocent, optimistic streak in him as well! I liked the way you wrote his relationship with his family- his father's remote pride, his animosity towards his mother and Kreacher- it all felt very in character.

It was very interesting to see Sirius' inherited prejudices about Muggles play against his natural open-mindedness, and I like the idea that his decision to abandon the principles of his family as a teenager might have stemmed from his friendship with Lexi as a child.

You did a great job of characterising Lexi too; she felt like a totally believable child, with her fights with her sisters. But there seems to be something darker going on there as well, with her absent father, and the financial constraints her mother appears to be under...
Her conversation with Sirius was just the sweetest thing! Again, they both felt genuinely childlike, with the kind of concerns and thoughts that children actually have.

But what could have happened to Lexi?! It was a bit of a twist, but a great one. Here too, I liked the combat in Sirius' mind between his Slytherin and Gryffindor sympathies...

This was a great and very intriguing first chapter! I look forward to reading the next one! ♥

Author's Response: Hi Bethany! And woo, congrats on that! :D And ohmygosh, thank you so much!

Awww, he is! I loved writing a younger Sirius, particularly as I had a little wriggle room with his personality :P I'm honoured that you felt he was in character though, since he's such a hard one to perfect ♥

Yup! I just couldn't contemplate the idea of Sirius rebelling against his family on the premise of - what, exactly? I think to have been placed in Gryffindor, and to rebel against his family like that, he must have been exposed to a different lifestyle before Hogwarts, and thus the idea of the girl next door was born.

Ooooh, thank you! And I'm really pleased that you felt my characterisation of Lexi and Sirius was spot on, especially with the whole childhood aspect.

Ahhh, you'll have to read on to find out! ;) Sirius does indeed have some Slytherin aspects of his personality, although he'll never admit it.

Thank you so much! ♥


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