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Review:Calypso says:
Hey there- I'm here from the forums!

I picked this as I saw it won a couple of Diadem Awards, and having read it, I can say that I can definitely see why! This was just stunning!

I was intrigued right from the beginning, from that gorgeous description of Caen, and of Camille. I absolutely adored the contrast between Camille's elegant clothes, and her ruthless killing of the solider. The "Avada Kedavra" came as such a shock! But it certainly made me want to read on!
(The same thing was true with Johanna and her Imperius Curse actually.)

I loved that you didn't just explain everything straight off, but made the reader gradually work out what was going on- it's nice to be made to engage with a story like that! And I have to say that this is *such* an original idea for a story- I've never read anything like it, and I'm really interested to see what you're going to do with this scenario...!

I really liked the structure of this chapter with the snapshots of all the different characters. You seem to be able to convey a lot about a character in just few words, so I feel like a really know this group of people, despite not having been with them for long. You've also managed to give them a lot of depth- so far, they all seem very real.
Handling so many main characters can be tricky, but so far you seem to be managing it well!

I'm guessing that the link to a canon character is Astrid's to Apolline? I'm interested to see how that dynamic will play out- especially if Astrid's also part Veela...

I'm extremely impressed by this chapter! It's so beautifully written, and so original, and I'll certainly be reading on! A stunning chapter ♥

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hi Bethany!

As I respond to this, the Dobby awards have taken place so I just want to thank you again for your immense support to the story, it really means the world!

The contrast between being feminine and a murderer is present in each of the girls. I think that as a woman in such times, you can look a lot more innocent then use that to your advantage, which is exactly what these three are doing.

Aw, thank you for finding this so original, and liking it too!

I'm so happy you think they're very real! What I was really worried about was making them come across as a bunch of super-trained wizards saving the world, so it's a relief to know that's not the case.

Astrid is book!Apolline's mother, yes, so Fleur's grandmother. In my head, Astrid is the Veela grandmother whose hair is in Fleur's wand.

Thank you again so, so much! ♥


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