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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
Yes! Done all the requested reviews in a day, so proud of myself! :)

I liked this chapter as well, I think you wrote Ron and Hermione very well. Their actions were all very canon, so well done there.

One issue I had was at the end-Hermione's mood seems to swing really quickly, as you describe her as spitting it out. I don't know, but it seems like a very fast change of mood. It just threw me a bit, that's all.

Just a typo I spotted: ' "Yeah and how sure was he of Snape" Ron demanded surly.' I think that's meant to be surlily, but since I'm pretty sure that word doesn't exist, you might have to use a different adverb.

All in all, a good chapter that lrft me wanting to read more.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I think I've fixed Hermione's extreme mood swing to being upset that Ron hadn't said good night.

I've changed the word from "surly" to "irritably". Thank you for pointing it out.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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