If only you could have been here to see my excitement when I realised you had posted a new chapter. Yay! I was thrilled, and your brilliant writing never lets me down. I absolutely loved basically everything about this chapter. This story is so insanely good that I wish you could publish it and earn lots and lots of money on it, but I know you can't. Even so, I hope you see how good it is!!
You've said before that there was going to be some drama happening at the Ball, so I knew that something was about to happen as soon as I read the chapter title.
Your descriptions are beautiful! I also loved Mrs Yaxley's cold, stern attitude towards the children, and the image of Daphne doing the House Elf Hustle and being carried away on her dad's shoulder was priceless! It was funny how her mother told her not to repeat that mistake, haha! I noticed one typo when you described the snow: "but itís memory lingers" should probably be: "but its memory lingers".
Also, you add little details about these characters that just make them seem so REAL, which is brilliant. One example is Pyxis telling Theo that he's going to make him take him everywhere once he's got his apparation license - God knows I said those exact same words to my brother when he got his driver's license, and I'm sure every younger sibling has done the same thing as me! ;)
This Christian character was interesting! I knew straight away that it had something to do with Theo being recruited, just like Pyxis had worried about. The way you wrote it was so suspenseful, and I've got so many questions about it! Was Terry the one being tortured? And if so, was it because they know about his and Tor's relationship? Because Theo did think that he deserved it... Well, let's just say I'm really worried about Terry and Tor now, and I MUST know what happens next, haha ;) I do hope that you'll find time to update soon, now that your exams are over! Either way, I'll be on the edge of my seat until then.
The way you describe Tor's feelings for Terry is just so beautiful. This was my favourite quote: "Perhaps we have bled into each other, embodied each other in absence, waiting to emerge when least expected." What a beautiful way of putting it.
What are they going to do now? I hope Tor's reaction doesn't give anything away - Pyxis probably understands what's going on, though. I just hope he can calm her down before anyone else does.
I don't really know what adjective to use to describe this chapter, so I'll give you 3: Great, brilliant, and perfect! I look forward to the next one.
Author's Response: Hello! :D Well if only you knew how excited I get when I see I have a new review from you! This is so long and thoughtful, just can't handle the awesome! :)
Ah, I'm glad you liked Mrs. Yaxley, I really need to include her more as she's so dry and entertaining to write! Daphne's little wild moment created an amusing mental image, as well, so I'm glad you appreciated those things! And yes, in many ways the siblings are just like any typical family, minus the dark murdering DE bits! :P The chapter definitely needed some humour before the depressing drama set in!
I am working on the next chapter now, and everything... well, some things will be explained! :) I'm so happy (cue evil author laugh) that you're feeling the suspense and nervous about the characters, it means my attempt at mystery is working! :D
I'm glad you liked those bits as well, and the little mentions of Terry and Tor's relationship. :)
Thank you so much for this amazing review, as always! It really makes me so, so happy and encourages me to get going with the following chapters, words cannot describe how much I appreciate it! :D