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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- back again!

I liked this chapter. I feel that the reminiscing of Harry was realistic and touching-however, I would think that the Weasleys knew more about what happened in Hogwarts, for example the incident with the troll. That's just me though, it was well-written and I don't really have an issue with it apart from that.

I really liked the newspaper article, and I think the reaction of Neville's grandmother was really good, very canon, and I can completely see why he's so scared of her. However, I would have liked to see Luna and her day's reactions to the article, not just Hannah and Neville.

And the Guardian thing! It's a really creative idea, and one I'd love to see developed some more.

Just one typo I spotted, when the professors all return to Hogwarts, Prof. McGonagall says "check you offices and your classrooms." I think that should be 'your offices and your classrooms,' or you could just shorten it to 'your offices and classrooms.'

All in all this was a good chapter that made me want more.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I agree, the Weasleys would know more of what happened at Hogwarts, though there might be a few things to still surprise them that the Trio didn't include in their explanations at the end of the year. I'll consider how to improve this section.

I've added a note to add Luna and her dad's reaction to Rita's article.

The Guardian of Hogwarts started out completely different when I first started writing the story. When I picked the story back up, I changed the meaning just a bit to reflect a choice.

I've fixed the typo. Thank you for pointing it out.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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