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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review.

Ooh, what just happened? Who caused it? I have so many questions now.

Anyway, down to reviewing. I think your descriptions were excellent in this chapter, I could really see the rising water, the falling towers. However, I would have liked to see more of the people's reaction to everything; you focused on one person at a time, which can be a good thing, but here, I would have liked more of the reactions of the crowd, for example, 'the crowd gasped in fear as a particularly violent wave hit the shield. For a moment, it had seemed like the shields were going to give way.' Adding in small sentences about what the crowd was doing would make this a lot more real.

I feel you did a good job building the suspense and mystery in this chapter-now I want to read on to find out what happened, how, why, when and who.

All in all, a good chapter that left me wanting more

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I've added the note to add the crowd's viewpoint and their reactions to what is happening.

I'm trying real hard to figure out if I can give a hint without revealing the answer, but it sounds like you might have figured out one of the secrets.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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