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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review! I'm sorry it's so late, I wanted to wait until the weekend so I could so them all in one go.

I really enjoyed reading from Hannah and Luna's points of view, and I love how they're all staring at each other trying to figure out everything about each other. The only thing is, I find it a bit unrealistic that everybody's focusing on Percy and why he's not sitting with his family. Also, if Percy is that obvious, I'd think that Scrimgeour would feel smug that he's got such a loyal worker, or something. Just a suggestion!

I like your use of the crow's harsh cawing-it gives a sense of foreboding and darkness to the atmosphere of the funeral.

I love how you had the Lovegoods wearing such a bright colour, it really emphasised their quirkiness. However, in The Deathly Hallows, Luna mentions that wearing yellow is for luck-I don't think Harry needs luck, seeing as everyone thinks he's dead. Perhaps you could have them wearing some other, equally bright, colour, like hot pink 'to rejoice for the peace of the dead' or some such other quirky explanation.

I loved your descriptions in this chapter, I could really see what was going on, and feel Hannah's remorse.

All in all, a really good chapter that made me want to spread onwards.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I've added a note to either reduce the notice of Percy not sitting with his family or else add Scrimgeour's smugness for a loyal employee. I'll have to decide which will work the best. :)

I've also added the note to change the color and why they're wearing that color. Thank you for pointing out that they wouldn't have been wearing yellow.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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