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Review:AlexFan says:
I really liked this chapter. It's my favourite one so far. I loved how unique it was and I loved learning what things might have been like before they invented technology and such.

It certainly makes a lot of sense and it was really fun to read.

I really like Merissa, she seems really friendly and my favourite part was where she said that she disliked playing the painoforte. I can't explain why but that just made her seem more real to me, doing something just because your parents wanted you to.

As for the flow of the chapter, it was in general really good but there were a couple of sentences that had misspelled words or missing words or were slightly confusing.

You have a good balance between dialogue and description (something that I'm always having trouble with). It's not always easy to achieve that balance but you do a good job of it. There's enough description so you know what's going on but not so much that there's nothing left to your imagination. And there's enough dialogue that it gets across everything that it needs to but not so much that it's all just dialogue.

I think this is your best chapter yet and I really enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I really like this era in history - there are so many huge strides in discoveries. I also like their focus on art and music.

I've added a note to look for the sentences that were confusing and for misspelled words.

Merissa really wants to play the violin but her mother is insisting that she learn the pianoforte first. :)

As I'm writing, I tend more to dialogue and really have to work to get the descriptions to be there. To get just the right amount of description is a challenge for me. :I

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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