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Review:HorseMad99 says:
Hi, it's your requested reviewer.
I am sorry I am so late! As mentioned on the thread I had an important exam yesterday which I have been studying for, so sorry again that it is so late.
The start is very good and I think it really captures her insecurities and many people will probably be able to relate to at least a few things that she talks about or what people say to her.
She seems so used to it, so much so that it doesn't even phase her at all and it's really sad that sometimes things do get to that point.
'Attempt to join in halfheartedly, but fail miserably' it is really sad because she is trying to act like everything is okay but in reality her whole world is sort of ripping at the seams.
The POV (point of view) change was not that clear and it took me a few moments to realise what had happened. This is easy to solve with either 'JAMES' POV' when it changes or put in your authors note something like 'The Pov changes between . and . after every quote of the song' it will just make it a bit easier for the reader especially if they are not concentrating hard I know from experience how confusing it can be if you don't concentrate enough and something suddenly dramatic happens and you can't remember who half of the characters even are.
I like the format of how the lyrics fitted into the song, there was a risk of it interrupting the flow but I think it worked really well and I like how it highlighted where the lyrics where for anyone who didn't know them.
I really liked the conversation about how they made her cry it was very realistic.
I find it really sad that she mas been messed around and lied to or made fun of so much that she doesn't even know what the truth is anymore.
I was also so sad when she said 'I don't deserve love' it must be so hard for anyone who gets to that point.
Finally just a little pet peeve over A/N's (feel free to ignore) I in particular find it a bit annoying if someone says something like 'I don't like this chapter' and when you said 'Regardless please review even it is to tell me how poorly it is written' I know I like it a lot better and tend to give more positive reviews if someone asks in more of a positive way so maybe say something like 'maybe you could give me some help on things to improve' it makes people think that by doing it they are helping you (which they are) rather than thinking oh she just wants me to say it wasn't very good so there is no point of me reviewing.
I really liked this, it was really sad but really good. Feel free to request another story!
Beth :)

Author's Response: Hi! That's fine - as you can see, I've been busy too, and that's why it's taken me so long to reply.

I'm glad you like the start - I really tried to capture the bullying that she's endured and show how deeply it's affected her.

As for the POV change, I like your idea, and I may add in a comment at the beginning saying that the POV will change after each lyric. Thanks for that suggestion!

I will go fix that A/N as well!

Thanks so much for this review!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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